It's all good with the exception of those small corrections listed above. Def wouln't rip it up and start over.

 

keepem coming guys

 

 

i pm'ed teach c6 and asked him if he would have a sec. to look this over for you and give some pointers....

 

sorry i have to agree with Rocket(except don't rip it up). Just revise it. i could not read through the whole thing. Structure and transition were poor. your audience has no knowledge of what we do so you need to inform them. i would not go into great detail about past riding from the early 1900's. Your goal is now, not then. touch and go.

i usually edit my papers a few times and always use spell check cause i mess up.

good luck bro

 

thanks guys!!!

 

Well Done You took it back pretty far great info-----Respect

 

Tony, you're not helping. :kicks Tony in the *****: Stick fighting is gay.

 

it looks good in my book

 

OH ---another guy with an opinion...

 

hahaha. I'm just ****in with ya, your D-ness. You said you were gunna email me back when you got back in the states. I see how it is. No love for the homeboys givin you props huh?

 

thanks guys! tony d: i wanted to use your enthusiasm in your article for a point that we all put alot of heart into this sport. hope you don't mind the context